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I am not above saying I told you so.

First of all, Merry Christmas, everyone!  I hope the holidays find  you well.  In the words of Cyndi Lauper, "I'd like to take this opportunity to wish you all a Merry Christmas and a Happy New Year. Oh, and by the way, have a nice life."  <3



That aside, I do have a (non-spoiler-ish) point to make about the DW Christmas Special.  Now I could talk about how Moffat is up to his same old tricks, and honestly, I'm getting rather bored with them.  Which means you are doing them wrong and/or you should be trying something different on for size.  Or I could talk about my rage moment, which if you know my pet peeves with New Who should be fairly easy to guess without me spoiling it.  I could even go into what I thought was a rather clever reference to Web of Fear, and you all know how I'm absurdly attached to that serial.  Or how I thought the Doctor was a bit thick for not figuring out the initials when I'd gotten it right off the bat without knowing in advance who the villain would be, though, granted, it has been a few centuries for him. 

But none of those are the points I'm here to make.  No, this one is a bit more personal. 

Some of you may be familiar with my story Lead and Follow.  In it, there is a scene where the Master takes Lizzie on board his TARDIS that goes something like this:

""It's... Are you Mary Poppins or something?"

The Master winced. When he had taken Lizzie to the new statue by the pier, he had gotten a lot of pleasure at seeing her marveling at his TARDIS. A proper TARDIS, not like that piece of junk the Doctor had stolen.

That, however, wasn't the proper response. Americans had to mess up everything, didn't they? There had to be something she could have compared him to with a bit more dignity."

However, that is not the original version of this scene.  Oh, no.  This was something that my dear beta reader, narwhale_callin made me change.  The original went something like this:

""It's... It's smaller on the outside!"
 
The Master winced.  When he had taken Lizzie to the new statue by the pier, he had gotten a lot of pleasure at seeing her marveling at his TARDIS.  A proper TARDIS, not like that piece of junk the Doctor had stolen.  
 
That, however, wasn't the proper response.  Americans had to mess up everything, didn't they?  It didn't sound quite as grand when it was 'smaller on the outside'.
"

Her reasoning being, and this is an exact quote: "As absolutely hilarious as this is, I’m having a hard time buying that someone would say “It’s smaller on the outside.”  It’s just…not what a person would say.  As I said, it’s hilarious that you reversed it, but it’s just not that realistic/believable.

However, I might suggest something of an alternative—you know, instead of being forced to resort back to “bigger on the inside.”  Since Lizzie’s American with limited experience of British people, why not have her blurt out something embarrassing like “Are you Mary Poppins or something?!”  I’m sure the Master would be just as annoyed by that.  XP"

My dear unicorn of the sea, I would just like to point out that when you do finally watch the Christmas special, that I was, in fact, right.  The new companion's exact words.  If it worked for Clara, it totally would have worked for Lizzie.  XP  Moffat, you may have issues, but occasionally you do validate me on things, and for that I can't argue. 

Basically... I did tell you so.  <3


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narwhale_callin
Dec. 26th, 2012 08:02 am (UTC)
I saw the Christmas Special, and when she said that line, I still thought it sounded awkward and unrealistic. Just because it happened doesn't mean that changes anything about the realism of that line of logic.

that I was, in fact, right

Right about what, exactly? Specify, woman! Right about it being realistic? No. Right about it being hilarious? Well, I agreed with you on that already, so there was no actual argument there.

Besides, since Clara is not, in fact, a person, but is, in fact, a Dalek or potentially some other Living Rip In Time or some other Inconceivable Moffatted Something, the weirdness of the line would be suitable for her because she does not, in fact, behave like a realistic person. (Seriously? Why the hell was she having two different identities for no apparent reason?) And that is why what (sort of badly) works for Clara does not, in fact, work for Lizzie, who behaves like an actual person because you write characters that actually make sense.

So there. I stand by my statment. **tips hat** Good day, madam.
dragonofmemory
Dec. 30th, 2012 04:15 am (UTC)
It didn't feel awkward or unnatural to me. It was actually one of the few moments I liked Clara, because for the most part I was bored by her and the whole "ZOMG, I'm giving them MOAR MYSTERIES" part of storyline. Admittedly, I was more involved with the Great Intelligence part of the storyline and Lady Vastra.

I stand by my statement. XP
narwhale_callin
Dec. 30th, 2012 04:19 am (UTC)
And I stand by my statement that what awkwardly worked for Clara would not have worked for Lizzie. :P
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